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Post by Tanith Low on Jan 21, 2016 10:33:05 GMT
Ok, before I start writing this we need to have think about Ronan's character. We could probably do with a character sheet for him.
Also if there is any dialogue Tom would like Sou to have with R then pop it up here so I can work the post around it.
Chhers.
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Post by Souvarine on Jan 21, 2016 10:58:22 GMT
My idea was:
Souvarine: "So, I hear you've made an improbably amount of money since going freelance. How did that happen?"
Ronan: (after some thought, in his typical, measured way: "I'm just very good at killing people."
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Post by Tanith Low on Jan 22, 2016 15:42:43 GMT
OK so here's the first pass. As always all dialogue is pace holder.
I'm not sure about this, it feels a bit "filler".
3's Company.
Sou's back after another bout of poking at things which don't concern him. Of course, as soon as he heard about the Barnacles being discovered in Merope he had to run 500ly to go and lick one.
But he's returned, full of energy and questions.
None of which I can answer. Even fewer that I care about, as long as he doesn't accidentally start a war.
I took the opportunity while he was in Candecama to introduce him to Ronny, who moved to the system as soon as he realised there was some really good hunting in the local space. He and I have been having a ball, after all 2 FDL's are better than one.
I Invited them both over to mine, Whelan Ring is an industrial habitat and there's not one good restaurant in the entire station. If I want to eat well, I have to cook it myself. Fortunately there's a guy who owes me a favour over in Opila so he occasionally express ships me good ingredients.
Ronny and Sou really seemed to hit it off, not surprisingly. Sou loves to talk, and Ronny likes to listen. Plus they both have an abiding love of Her Imperial Majesty (bask in her whatever). They got chatting while I was pouring us a few whiskeys and I came back just in time to hear Sou ask:
“Vex tells me you've made an improbable sum of money since you left the Navy. How have you done that?”
Ronny took the drink from me, took a sip and said, thoughtfully: “I suppose I'm just very good at blowing ships up.”
Not boasting, just stating the fact. That's Ronny for you, he is the least egotistical guy I know, but he knows what he's good at.
"Marvellous. Two of you," sighed Souvarine.
“Not quite,” replies Ronny. “I'm a better pilot than Dexter.”
Sou looked at me to see what my reaction to this was, but I just shrugged. I can't deny it, he is.
“Besides”, continued Ronny “Dexter is...”
Sou smiled. “An ornamental butter-knife short of a picnic?”
“I was going to say 'unhinged'.”
“Psycopathic? Unable to legally live within two hundred metres of a school?”
“More of a lunatic, isn't he?”
They're both looking at me grinning.
“The phrase you're looking for,” I said, “is highly-functioning sociopath. More importantly, a sociopath who knows where you both live.”
I give them both a smile to let them know I'm kidding, and go and get a cigar. There's a brief silence behind me which, unusually, Ronny breaks.
“So Souvarine, Dexter tells me you're a pretty good pilot yourself.”
“He said that, did he?” replied Sou, sounding surprised.
“Not quite. His exact words were 'he can be a pretty tidy scrapper when he can be bothered' which from Dexter is pretty much the same thing.”
“Yes that sounds more like what he'd say,” says Sou.
“Well, before you arrived Vex and I were discussing a pirates nest not far from here at Cande 16 A. Sizeable bounties, would you like to share?”
Well that was all Sou needed to hear. Exploring the great unknown pays pathetically and the Vortigaunt doesn't fuel itself. So once the two of them pull themselves out of their beds we're off to Candecama 16 A to upset the locals.
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Post by Souvarine on Jan 22, 2016 17:49:14 GMT
Dude, it's really good. I've gone in and tweaked Souvarine's dialogue.
These sort of posts always feel like filler but they're necessary for story continutity, and - as you've demonstrated here - a good opportunity for dialogue! Nice work.
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Post by Tanith Low on Jan 22, 2016 19:06:45 GMT
Awww shucks. Thanks.
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